Feedback from the 2024 SlamDance Competition:

“GENRE: Drama/Comedy SHORT FEEDBACK: The script has really clever dialogue, and the relationships between these characters are incredibly well-thought-out and dimensional….”

Feedback #1 from the 2024 Screencraft Comedy Competition where “Limping Towards Babylon” was named a semi-finalist:

“The writer brings their distinct personality and imbues originality into a story focusing on the dynamics between a mismatched friend group that works really well to reveal layers for the individuals as the narrative progresses. There is an immense talent for dialogue on display, deftly conveying character personality and pathos amid witty barbs and entertainingly meandering exchanges.”

Feedback #2 from the 2024 Screencraft Comedy Competition where “Limping Towards Babylon” was named a semi-finalist:

“One of the things that really elevates “Limping Towards Babylon” is the layering of the characterization.  The group all have distinct motivations and each acts with consistent agency.  These are all smart and highly educated characters and yet we also see their more lizard brain impulses that sit below the surface.  The contrast between what is verbalised and the subtext beneath it lends the character dynamics a great tension that sustains reader interest across the narrative.”

Feedback  from the 2024 Golden Script Competition

“The beginning of the story hooks you right in with a strong setup, introducing Marcus and Thomas right off the bat. It hints at their comedic tone through their dialogue and actions, making it easy for audiences to relate to them. As the plot unfolds, it skillfully delves into their individual journeys, blending their career ambitions with personal obstacles. The screenplay is packed with vibrant character dynamics and hilarious exchanges. It really captures the essence of living together, highlighting all the quirks and complexities that come with it. Each housemate, from Marcus and Thomas to E and Adam, brings something unique to the table, drawing audiences in with a blend of novelty and familiarity. Following their lives, from initial interviews to everyday interactions in shared spaces, adds layers to the story and keeps viewers hooked. It’s like reliving those college days in a whole new light…. The conflict arising between Thomas and Professor Bligh serves as a gripping focal point that propels the story forward, capturing the audience’s attention and drawing them deeper into the narrative. It’s this tension that keeps viewers on the edge of their seats, eagerly invested in how the conflict will unfold and its eventual resolution…. COMMERCIALITY This script holds strong commercial potential, appealing to audiences intrigued by workplace dramas and character-driven narratives. Its seamless blend of humour, drama, and emotional depth renders it accessible to a broad spectrum of viewers. Furthermore, its themes of ambition, betrayal, and redemption strike a chord with audiences across various demographics, making it a compelling choice for both entertainment and reflection. ORIGINALITY Although communal living has been a recurring theme in the media, this script breathes new life into the concept with its vibrant characters and captivating dialogue. The fusion of humour, drama, and romance injects originality into the narrative, presenting a fresh perspective on the intricacies of modern relationships. This unique blend promises to captivate audiences and leave a lasting impression with its refreshing take on communal living. COMPLEXITY The script skillfully navigates between humour and underlying tensions, enriching the narrative with complexity. The interactions between characters are multi-layered, mirroring the intricacies of human relationships within a shared living space. Nevertheless, delving deeper into the characters’ backstories and motivations could enhance the richness of the story, adding even more depth to the overall narrative. PRODUCTION VALUE The script presents exciting opportunities for creative direction and production design, especially in portraying the claustrophobic and disorienting atmosphere of the communal house. Employing static staging coupled with dynamic camera movements enriches the visual storytelling while grounding the narrative in everyday settings and adds authenticity to the production. With careful execution, the script holds the promise of transforming into a visually striking and immersive experience for viewers, capturing their attention and drawing them into the story’s world.”